Katsuhito posted a comment on Tuesday 5th February 2008 8:24am

Yeah! Another chapter of what is becoming my favorite "new" fanfic. A few typo/gramm-o's in there (most notably where you say "180,000 thousand times" - I assume the number you were referring to was 180,000c, not 180,000,000c), but otherwise up to your usual high standard. I did like the Fleet/Rebel bit, and I also like that you have Dumble's patience with Snape starting to thin even before Harry arrives. That's much more likely, I think, than how it's usually portrayed. Unfortunately, I must now hate you for ending the chapter on such a cliffhanger. :) (j/k) So, as Stan the Man would say: Excelsior!

amulder posted a comment on Tuesday 5th February 2008 7:19am

Re: Harry's final words... I would have expected him to say something in Marain, whatever they use for outbursts. Unconsciously reverting to his "mother tongue" after all.

And how did Dumbledore round up a dozen people so quickly? The author tells us that it is the Order, so they are probably scattered all over the place.

oh, and if you think I'm coming across a bit grumpy, it's because I really wanted to see Harry get to Hogwarts, but you've delayed us for yet another chapter. Argh!

I fully expect a lot of frustrated wizards in the next chapter. They are all so used to getting their way. Who will toss the first "obliviate"?

On the other hand. The Culture folks are also all so used to getting their way. A lot depends on you, the author, and how you plan to write the way magic interacts with Culture technology. So far you seem to be writing that the Culture technology is sufficiently advanced that it somewhat understands Harry's magic, and in fact they use some if in transport and so on. But if the Culture is completely superior to Dumbledore and crew, then that would seem to take away a large chunk of the plot tension. Where would the challenge be?

Hmmm.

I don't really care about pairing at this point. Heck, I had read all the way through GoF, back in 2002, before I even thought about pairing. Let them be 11, or in Harry's case with his more advanced development, let him interact more with Angelina, or Katie, or some of the other girls 2-3 years older than him.

Hmmm, just how tall/mature/developed is Harry compared to his classmates? I would expect him to be far more physically fit than the majority of the first or even second year students.

The sorting could be fun. One wonders how Harry's Culture guardians will react to a strange voice/being suddenly speaking in his head -- they'll be aware of it through the neural lace, won't they? That might confuse the heck out of the hat.

And further to sorting... your author comments are telling as well. Harry is spoiled, but not spoiled like Malfoy, so I don't see him in the house of the ambitious. So far your harry seems very laid back. So I also don't see him as brave/agressive for Gryffindor. Not sure about hardworking either, having so much handed to him, which leaves out Hufflepuff AND Ravenclaw, since he needn't struggle so with his learning. For that matter, will Sma + crew even LET him go live in a house versus staying with them?

Curious.

Keep it up, great fun.

ps: I went out and read "Consider Phlebas". Weird. Not at all what I expected after reading your story. Not sure I'll even bother reading more of them or not.

vl100butch posted a comment on Tuesday 5th February 2008 7:01am

I hope you bring Dumbledore back to the ship, just to show him that his every move is being monitored....

The wizards at Hogwarts are in for as big a shock as when Grantville descended onto Thrungia (for those 1632 fans who will get the reference)

Torrey posted a comment on Tuesday 5th February 2008 4:13am

woo hoo! another interesting chapter!

Damn... and look what you've gone and done now... I've got to go and read the books! :)

Well, good luck, and I look forward to the next chapters!

Michael Foerster posted a comment on Tuesday 5th February 2008 2:59am

Great stuff!
But in your Author's Notes you said

He had not had sex yet

, but what about Chomba -- from the previous chapter -- just what did they do there? (Anything but penal insertion?)
This is no critic, but just a question for clarification.
Thanks for the work.

dexterz posted a comment on Tuesday 5th February 2008 2:59am

looking forward to the next chapter.....this one was good but not very interesting to say the truth but the confrontation next chapter is what i'm looking forward to the most.
please update soon

Evil monster posted a comment on Tuesday 5th February 2008 2:56am

He had not had sex yet and will not until sometime in either his fourth or fifth-year at Hogwarts.

Boy, Rusk, just how long is this story gonna be?

Wolfric posted a comment on Tuesday 5th February 2008 2:40am

I continue to enjoy your story. I am lookinjg forward to Hary reaching Hogwarts. Your Author's notes are helpful in filling in some of the blanks. Thanks for writing. W.

Kaerion posted a comment on Tuesday 5th February 2008 1:56am

Well, this story just keeps getting better and better. I absolutely love science fiction backed up by competent world building, and even though I wasn't familiar with the Culture before reading this fic, you've gotten me hooked by now. You've done an excellent job explaining the ins and outs of the Culture well enough for me to understand it fairly well, and luckily without falling into the trap of ruining the flow of the story with too much exposé-type listing of facts and figures.

What you said about Harry's interactions with all the other canon characters (especially his friends and enemies) is exactly what I was hoping for, so I can't wait to see how that turns out, starting next chapter with the resolution to your cliffhanger.

I've always wondered how a (several millennia+) more advanced civilization would react to our own, so I'm very much looking forward to seeing your take on it. If it continues to be as good as it has been (and I have every confidence that it will), this will definitely stay on my list of favorite crossovers.

-Kaerion

Aaran St Vines posted a comment on Monday 4th February 2008 7:26am

I never heard of The Culture, etc. until this tale. I have no time to explore it, though it does sound fascinating. I Wikipedia'd it for enough data to read going forward, and I am excited about the possibilities here.

Curious though, arriving on Nov.2, will you kill off Hermione? No connection with Ron or Ginny at the start will be interesting, as well as whichever house you sort this Harry into.

Fine first three chapters.

Dale Dietzman posted a comment on Sunday 3rd February 2008 12:49pm

Soooo.....

If Harry's current limit is 50 kilos, that means conjuring a 100 pound anvil over Malfoy's head for "the Acme solution" to an annoyaning problem is certainly within his reach.

Beep-Beep.

D.

gallandro_83 posted a comment on Sunday 3rd February 2008 2:52am

waiting on the next chapter until then just came across this

"Can’t wait to get your hands on the new Iain M. Banks Culture novel? Use your ears instead!

Matter is available for pre-release download on iTunes UK. Listen to the complete, unabridged version for only £21.95. You can also buy the abridged version on CD February 7th."

maybe it's something your interested in??

gallandro

Chrisgocountyjr posted a comment on Saturday 2nd February 2008 8:20pm

Wow. I'm hooked on this story as well. Can't wait for the next chapter to show up.

Aelita posted a comment on Friday 1st February 2008 10:08pm

PLease update soon! This is great stuff! Thanks

Sean the Metamage posted a comment on Wednesday 30th January 2008 12:12pm

I'm really interested in this fic. The premises are really good.

I hope to see more of this later.

Thwaaack posted a comment on Monday 28th January 2008 9:19pm

Wow, I have to say now that I have found and read the book Consider Phlebas, as well as reading some more information in regards to the culture background. If you interpret it the same way I do, the knife missile that Harry has been granted is a mini drone, the size of a small dagger, equipped with fields and effectors, and capable of slaughtering an entire army in under a second. Unless you plan on making it so none of the technology of the Culture works within Hogwarts (which I doubt would happen, as I'm sure even the simplest of culture tech is more hardened then the most sohpisticated tech on Earth currently, or even in the forseeable future. ) the wizarding world won't know what hit it. I am really looking forward to more now that I have some background into your crossover source. Keep it up!

hi_abhishek19 posted a comment on Monday 28th January 2008 1:12am

Very good, I can't wait to read how the wizaeding world wuuld think about harry. Update soon please.

Dale Dietzman posted a comment on Wednesday 23rd January 2008 10:59am

"And you didn’t listen to me when I told you to stop."

"I told you; I simply didn’t catch that."

Sma sent the drone a glare. "What’s even worse is that you enjoyed it."

Skaffen-Amtiskaw dipped one corner. "I will admit to feeling a certain satisfaction about my actions. But I have done as you requested; I have only ever used the minimum force needed to subdue those people that have attacked you since then."

Sma nodded in agreement and then levelled a flat look at the drone. "And I hope you stick to that. However," she took a deep breath, "if anyone on Terra even looks at Harry the wrong way, I want you to cut loose with everything you have. Effector fields, knife-missiles, X-ray lasers, Antimatter nanomissiles — I don’t care what you use or how you use it. I want the fuckers dead before a single hair on that boy’s head is mussed out of place. Understand?"

Soooooo, you're going to make life 'interesting', no, 'problemitical' for one Draco Malfoy are you?

Alex Mcpherson posted a comment on Wednesday 23rd January 2008 6:55am

Took out Consider Phlebas from the Library - Good book. :D
Just upto Hora Borza Gorbuchul being told he could fight... vallum or whoever - on the merc ship.Gonna read as many of them as i can from the library since i dont have much money to buy them - and i may not like them... (I took out the HP books 1-6 from the library to read before i bought any.)

Patches posted a comment on Wednesday 23rd January 2008 3:21am

This is quite an interesting story. Harry is deffinitely living in an advanced society that seems to see children as something they want but the idea of family and morals seem to be very lax. I am wondering how Harry is going to adjust to a more Victorian era Britan after growing up in the Culture. This is going to be very interesting. thanks for writing. I look forward to more of this story. pms