darkelf12 posted a comment on Tuesday 26th February 2008 2:52pm

All I can really say at this point is I hope Ruskbyte gets back to this because this is a story worth finishing.

morriganscrow posted a comment on Monday 21st January 2008 12:15pm

Pretty please take up this excellent story again! It would be a crying shame if you didn't finish it.
Pretty please with a cherry on top? Before a Tribble eats it?

FenrisWolf posted a comment on Thursday 20th December 2007 5:44pm

I may have reviewed this chapter before, but what the heck, here we go again.

I noticed one thing that *might* become a continuity error. In an earlier chapter Harry plans on issuing the plasma rifles to the drones as weapons, but in this chapter it's stated that the rifle's draw on the wizard's own magic to power them. Unless the drones' construction allows them to perform magic, I don't see how they would supply the necessary energy to make the rifles work.

No doubt you're tired of being asked, but is there *any* chance of this story being continued, if not y you then by someone else? With the dreadful ending of the series, every good H/Hr fan fic is to be treasured, and of all those incomplete ones I've read, this is still my favorite, Please, PLEASE continue!

Thwaaack posted a comment on Monday 10th December 2007 5:14am

I have to say, Harry telling Ron that Draco is really his long lost twin sister had me laughing so hard I thought I was going to have an aneurism.

twilightxpanic posted a comment on Thursday 29th November 2007 1:07am

wooooooooo. go blaise. can't wait to see how all of Harry's little plans unfold.

Athena_Rhea posted a comment on Monday 26th November 2007 7:24pm

I like the idea so far, but the only thing I'm not so agreeable with is the fact that this seemingly older Harry is making such hugely broad generalizations...

I don't know, this Harry seems a bit...too forward, too sure of himself and offers very little understanding to other people. In other words, nearly qualifies as a world class prat. BUT I'm hoping that there is a reason for this...and as such, I shall read on!

magus213 posted a comment on Sunday 25th November 2007 7:30am

Oh Ruskbyte, where are you?

ahsun92 posted a comment on Sunday 11th November 2007 6:27pm

A very unique story. Captivating and brilliant i cant say much more!
Keep it up!

prophet37 posted a comment on Thursday 8th November 2007 5:02pm

Mister Green Turtle?????

After I picked myself off the floor after falling off my chair laughing
I then proceded to start bashing my head against the wall to get rid of the horrific mental picture of Hagrid in a leotard laughing insanely plotting to capture his dear Ranma-Sama!

Brilliant story, keep it up and update soon, please.

impliedauthor posted a comment on Thursday 11th October 2007 10:26am

Good story, I'm looking forward to finding out what happens! Update soon!

penguins4me posted a comment on Thursday 4th October 2007 8:36pm

Oh, yes, do go on. I want to hear what BZ has to say to these ideas of Harry's. Thank you for a very entertaining story so far.

brad posted a comment on Monday 1st October 2007 9:49pm

Only just noticed (here for a quick re-read):

"I, er, forgot that I don't need to shave, and used a Shaving Charm..."

That's a bit of a gaffe on Harry's part, isn't it? I suspect this might have started Dumbledore thinking about what it meant ... a Harry who used to shave must obviously be an older Harry ... i.e. a Harry from the future ...?

Such a pity this story is abandoned! I loved the H/Hr - a lovely feel to it - and all of the other characters. The story's a bit preposterous, future!Harry a bit over-the-top, but hey, it's written so well and so engaging, who cares about that?

squiddy posted a comment on Thursday 20th September 2007 8:20pm

Hmm.. is this still being updated? Last update was around 9 months ago... It's a great story and pretty much engrossing to read. I really hope you'll continue writing.

Thanks!

Decumo9 posted a comment on Saturday 15th September 2007 12:53pm

great story, i hope you update sometime...

Steven Augart posted a comment on Wednesday 15th August 2007 12:28am

This is another exciting chapter that moves the story along nicely.

I despise Snape; I can't believe his treatment in DH. So I like the Snape-bashing in this chapter.

It's a nice dramatic touch to end the chapter with the speech by "Doppleganger Unit One", which thereupon tells us, the readers, that there is at lest one Doppleganger Unit, and that this is why Harry's emotions have been so flat.

Nit(s):

You write "it's" in several places where you want the possessive "its".

Steven Augart posted a comment on Wednesday 15th August 2007 12:09am

I enjoy the train scenes. "... will result in my being required to kill you."
Your Malfoy is so despicable, it's very satisfying to read about Bad Things happening to him.

I'll cover a nit or nits here:

You write:

identical to how he had appear

You want "appeared", not "appear".


You write: "leaned in close to hissed". I suggest "leaned in close to him and hissed"

You write:

looking completely unruffled as not in the slightest bit perturbed by what had just transpired

I think that instead of "as", you want "as if" or "and".

You write:

Ministry Crew --as the other members of the DA were want to refer to the six students

You want "wont" instead of "want".

Steven Augart posted a comment on Tuesday 14th August 2007 11:47pm

This is an exciting chapter.

One nit to pick: you frequently write

Sirius'

when you want the form of the possessive that UKR uses

Sirius's

Steven Augart posted a comment on Tuesday 14th August 2007 10:37pm

This is an exciting introduction to the story. It triggers a lot of curiousity.

I like the story a lot, and have read it on fanfiction.net. I'm glad to see it here.

I think this is a very funny couple of sentences:

Vernon thought that something had happened and his nephew had dropped dead because of it. He didn't know whether to be worried or thrilled by this,

Minor suggestion for this chapter:
You write:

willing to do whatever to took

I think you want "...whatever iit took ".

I think you can drop the TBC at the end of the chapter, since you've already continued it.

mastapsi posted a comment on Friday 27th July 2007 9:32pm

Can't wait for you to come back dude!!! Hope things are going better for you!

I just reread this and it is still just as good as it was when I first read it. Your a great writer and your writing is clean with only a few mistakes here and there. Can't wait to see more again!

cutecess posted a comment on Thursday 12th July 2007 4:11pm

gave even Piers, the brashest of the group, pause

You've mentioned a phrase like that (with malfoy) before in this chapter, but it's slightly wrong.

Piers is pausing, it's a verb but you're using it like a noun (best way to put it). I would probably phrase it something like: MADE even Piers, the brashest of the group, pause.

I love your story! :) My favourite bit is Luna, and the way you've incorporated her as more than an afterthought because she went to the ministry in 5th year